Thread:Calicokat/@comment-4091815-20141029150327/@comment-4091815-20141108022343

It becomes a bit muddled in the "digital mirroring" section. The Stiles room portion is so visual and so clear - we need to be just as clear when discussing the reversed images. It could be as simple as saying, "in these scenes, everything is reversed" and give a few examples.

I'll work on the transition between mirroring and disappearing to help tie it all together.

You might think about adding something in the intro, a single line would do, that sums up and introduces what you're about to discuss. I know that sounds counter-intuitive but stating your premise - that the characters are dimension hopping - at the start will help folks better understand and frankly make it more of a "must read" piece.

I'll have time to go over this more fully on Sunday. We'll publish again late on Monday with heavy promotion beginning Tuesday.